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Post by beautifulchildslove on Sept 10, 2004 15:46:02 GMT -8
My pain is unbearable So much to carry I try not to let go But I'm slipping, Slowly slipping.
I grasp for anything I must hold on to something Hold on for dear life And not let go, Let go.
My heart will stop beating I will slip into blackness A dark void nothing could fill And I feel all alone, So alone.
My soul is breaking Into a thousand tiny pieces Tears are slipping Down my face, Sliding down.
A steady river, An ocean even Nothing can dry them Nothing can cure my pain, Cure the pain.
I am forsaken Nobody is by me I am hated Or so it seems, So it seems.
Feelings are building Oh how they're building Stormy clouds roll in Promising more rain, Yet more rain.
I cannot understand, Cannot even begin to comprehend Why this happened to me I don't deserve such pain, Deserve such pain.
My best friend is forsaking me Turning away from me All because I took a stand I told her she was wrong, That she was wrong.
She doesn't have that voice In her head The one that tells you If you're wrong, So wrong.
I cannot feel any better Only worse. Why am I forsaken? I am so alone, So alone.
I don't know what will happen My mind and heart are in a conflict. An internal conflict. But I know, Whichever wins, The other person Will be hurt more. I don't know what to do, I don't know what to say, I am so alone, So alone.
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Post by clearvapour on Sept 22, 2004 23:57:10 GMT -8
Thats really good!
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Post by beautifulchildslove on Sept 23, 2004 14:31:50 GMT -8
Thanks! Haha it would sound better if there wasn't any pirate slang on this board. lol.
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Post by klm15851 on Sept 23, 2004 15:58:51 GMT -8
^ I see what you mean. It loses something in the "translation". LOL
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Post by irina_casandra on Oct 4, 2004 23:00:11 GMT -8
Wow. it's good.
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Post by puppyprincessgrl on Oct 5, 2004 14:31:53 GMT -8
i like i like
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Post by faerieprincess720 on Apr 7, 2005 17:56:25 GMT -8
it is so sad, creepy and depressing yet good!
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Post by cookie__the__rat on Apr 12, 2005 5:14:36 GMT -8
What a cool poem. Sad, yet very enjoyable.
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Post by queencarlina on Apr 16, 2005 16:28:07 GMT -8
Wow beautifulchildslove, that is so good! I could NEVER write anything like that!! Keep up the good work! *claps*
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Post by hpfanisme2000 on Apr 16, 2005 18:31:39 GMT -8
thats great but it creeps me out cause for all i know it could be some ADHD meds you are on...lo, j/k sounds great thoughand yeah it does lose the flow and rythm of it when put into print
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Post by fullbloom720 on Apr 19, 2005 13:07:56 GMT -8
Very well written poem, beautifulchildslove! You really express the emotions of the person in the poem.
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